Slow is why you make it, for a separate peace
finding Buddhist ponder, Quaker quiet.
To those demanding tribute, turn the other face
slowly as you make it, at a modest pace.
You're born for a certain span and given space
to stand and hold the world and try it --
deep is how you feel it, in the inner place
finding Buddhist ponder, Quaker quiet.
this is an enjoyable meditation...slowing down and enjoying...nice one shot
ReplyDeleteMy, My Trulyfool --- I truly love this...the Quaker Quite....- and the rhyme, just a perfect touch...read a small book on a plane once by the Quaker writer Parker Palmer...which lead me to read more of his work..this poem brought back the nice memory...bkm
ReplyDeleteStrikes my warped mind as a bit of a Beat triolet--with assonance and signature style. And I don't think you sacrificed too much to the form, rather bent it to your purpose.
ReplyDeleteThis flows so nicely.
ReplyDeletethe right breath - so important - in making music - in running - in relaxing - nice and peaceful poem
ReplyDeleteBrian,
ReplyDeleteIt really was a one-shot. Strictly a lyrical try to fill a form. Not my usual 'thing' -- but I liked how it came out.
Trulyfool
Barbara,
ReplyDeleteRecent decade moved me to avoid the sudden desperation people felt and the reactive ideas they came up with.
There's value in watching the rush pass.
The form was suggested by another of us, hedgewitch. She gave me the impetus, I took up the attempt.
TFool
Joy,
ReplyDeleteWhen I go too 'musical' I get nervous. So this form did have to bend or I would 'go bulemic'. Nevertheless, I did slather on the rhyme, not so?
Beat. I hadn't thought of it, but it does mix east/west meditations.
Trulyfool
Fireblossom,
ReplyDeleteI worry about 'flow'. This does. So long as it doesn't become 'flow-through', I feel safe.
TFool
Claudia,
ReplyDeleteI like peace. So often my writing holds too much irony for it. I traveled a comfortable path this time.
Trulyfool
there is definitely a peace and a pace to this that quiets the mind, a meditation in and of itself. thanks for sharing it.
ReplyDeleteI could relate to this very much.. thanks I liked you last lines...
ReplyDelete'deep is how you feel it, in the inner place
finding Buddhist ponder, Quaker quiet.'
thanks for sharing..
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Joanna,
ReplyDeleteThank you for coming here. Like your site as well -- your poetry reverberates with me.
TFool
Shashi,
ReplyDeleteGlad you came along to this blog. Yours is a good one, full of interesting things -- I shall go back to it!
Trulyfool