Herbie Mann Comin' Home

Friday, January 7, 2011

Cinquains Théologiques











Who Dat

gives me guidance

from a book of strong songs

histories, rules, and human goofs,

deep sin


Deep sin

in my pocket

jangles and annoys me

weighs down moves, co-opting space for

no lord


No lord

rules over me

but one whose name is nil

by his own device he's no one

who dat


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4 comments:

  1. I like the mix of apparent flippancy and profundity, and the circular progression to a satisfying conclusion that there are no satisfying conclusions...or perhaps no explainable ones. I never did agree with Dylan on that line about how "you got to serve somebody."

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  2. The " concetti" are the best way to mean a strong idea as" you' re your own lord" using short sentence,so the sadness is drown in the beauty.

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  3. Joy,

    Thank you for carefully reading! My flippancy can be profound, and my profundity clownish. But we're among friends. (Just don't let others know).

    I faltered in analyzing this for myself, but I came to the word 'sequence', which I guess this is a small example of.

    Occasionally I find myself in line with Bob Dylan 'ideas', but more often with Dylan Thomas.

    B.D. is like favorite food. Everyone really, really likes the stuff, but when I portion some on my plate, I find I can't quite finish.

    TFool

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  4. Isabelle,

    Yes. Encapsulating an idea in short space does what the ancient, oral poets did -- memorize phrases that condense some reflexive emotional power. (So long as we allow our tongues to savor them).

    And the -- let me credit the French! -- symbolist infusion of idea into succulent image -- so many times I've tried and fallen short!!

    Trulyfool

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